2. Martin, whose father had been a butcher, and who had himself griped to pictures of slain animals, was tired of Simone telling him how he should speak to the cold cuts.

Ans.

2. Martin, whose father had been a butcher and who had himself griped to pictures of slain animals, was tired of Simone's telling him how he should speak to the cold cuts.

1) No comma is needed to separate the compound relative clauses "whose father had been a butcher" and "who had himself griped to pictures of slain animals." (1 pt.)

2) Because "telling him how he should speak to the cold cuts" is a gerund phrase in the object's position; therefore, it needs to have the possessive form in front of it (even if the adjective modifying it is a proper noun). After all, Martin doesn't object to Simone (well, maybe he does that too). He objects to her telling him how to speak. (1 pt.)

Total = 2 pts